I wrote a song (actually two songs, one twenty years after the first when I understood life better), which sang the entire Love Chapter (1 Corinthians 13). Mine is very individualistic in style, and would likely be suitable in a high school choir (which is how I plan to use it this year); but you could create you own on this text which tells what real love is, what it isn't, in its actual applications in the world. You can even make more specific applications than the text without violating its spirit. Churchy words (God, righteousness, holiness) are noticeably absent from this masterpiece.
What do non-Christians need to know about life more than what real love is?
There is a popular cliche today that we are to sing "to God, not about God", which I disagree with. We sing to God when we are singing about God, and we are singing about God when we are singing to Him. There are differing degrees of "personal" quality, of course, as opposed to "telling and teaching" quality.
I agree with your concept of "telling of our view on life." If we spend all of our time singing nice worship phrases, the perception can grow that we are either hiding something or there is nothing there to hide. We should be "revealing the mystery", which is what Jesus did for us -- he ripped away the veil and showed us what love is like, and what love is.
I might take that one step further --
God directs His message to the whole world, whether the reader/listener goes to a church or claims to be a Christian or not. So all labels are off -- we don't need to have one message for the church, and another for the street.
The "acceptability" concept, or "packaging" has to do with speaking a comprehensible language. But even if we communicate successfully in regards to language, if we don't communicate with love in attitude and action, the words not only won't be understood, they will have a negative effect.
Your 'Break My Heart' song is great for church, home, gig-place or anywhere! Your musical presentation is wonderful, too, funner than anything!